Character Sketch
While I wait for you
lost like a child
crawling, absorbed in the memory
of tiny eyes unblinking
and
While I wait for you
in your black dress
with sunken eyes
wishing for eternal life
like Heaven's existence will make or break you
I whisper
While I wait for you
you strong bull of a mother
once a giver of love, turned alien due to lack thereof
I reach out
through this heartbreak
I reach out [M.K. Cook]
Maddie, I really enjoyed reading your poem! I loved when you personified the character with, "you strong bull of a mother". It clearly describes the attitude and ways of the character. Also the tone of your poem is well portrayed throughout, with your use of adjectives and repitition. Overall, it is very well written and I really liked it! (:
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